Wednesday, May 27, 2009

Overtones



Smoke wisps gather,
around my eyes.
And water melts,
shimmering
on the fabric of dreams.

The rise and fall
of twined destinies
everlasting seems.
Only to end,
the next moment.

Clear notes of sweet pain,
of drugged existence,
of primal need,
Confound my senses.
And I am lost.

But then, from within
salvation beckons.
Its whisper, I can hear
amidst the caresses,
leading me on.

The faint murmurs
make symphony,
with the arcane cries.
And from the depth,
The crescendo begins.

The rising ecstasy,
takes me to
the zenith of life.
And then,
Life stops.


12 smoke wisps:

Shamanth said...

excellent flow!!!
but y the sudden death at the end?
or does it signify something else?

Meghana Naidu said...

*ignores shamanth* ;)

Bhargavi said...

An Orgasm.
=D

Meghana Naidu said...

@boogers: I'm shocked at how accurate your answer is! Its almost like you were hiding in the corner of my head while i was writing this ;)

theme AND the right 'scenario' perfectly caught. :D

Shamanth said...

@ meg : but u forgot how i gave u two more perspectives other than this one!!!

*furiously demands the candy given to boogers!* :P

Meghana Naidu said...

@shamanth
Oh those two perspectives made this poem so much more special!

for the other (?) curious readers out there they are
1. drug overdose 2. a soldier's last moments

Oh and the kid deserves her candy!
Dont worry,
*gives chocolate&coffee hamper to shamanth*
*throws in a few smiles* :)

Shamanth said...

hell yeah!!!!

:D

*snatches the hamper* :D

*catches all your smiles*

ZiLliOnBiG said...

lovely poem, went through your blog, a higly dreamy space. you have creativity oozing in every verse. Keep churning, good luck:)))

BrownPhantom said...

Damn, I was so far off :).
But that's the beauty of it, I guess :).

Meghana Naidu said...

@Z big
thank you, the blog description felt very nice ;)

@Phantom
Thank you :) what i felt amazing was how EACH one of the people who read it felt it concerned a completely different subject! what was your guess?

Merin Mandanna said...

Yhis one's ultimate.
ULTIMATE.
'The rise and fall
of twined destinies
everlasting seems.'
Yes yes yesss!

Meghana Naidu said...

@M: imagine what writing it was like

*GRIN* :D "thank you, thank you"

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