Wednesday, May 27, 2009

Overtones



Smoke wisps gather,
around my eyes.
And water melts,
shimmering
on the fabric of dreams.

The rise and fall
of twined destinies
everlasting seems.
Only to end,
the next moment.

Clear notes of sweet pain,
of drugged existence,
of primal need,
Confound my senses.
And I am lost.

But then, from within
salvation beckons.
Its whisper, I can hear
amidst the caresses,
leading me on.

The faint murmurs
make symphony,
with the arcane cries.
And from the depth,
The crescendo begins.

The rising ecstasy,
takes me to
the zenith of life.
And then,
Life stops.


12 comments:

  1. excellent flow!!!
    but y the sudden death at the end?
    or does it signify something else?

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  2. *ignores shamanth* ;)

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  3. @boogers: I'm shocked at how accurate your answer is! Its almost like you were hiding in the corner of my head while i was writing this ;)

    theme AND the right 'scenario' perfectly caught. :D

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  4. @ meg : but u forgot how i gave u two more perspectives other than this one!!!

    *furiously demands the candy given to boogers!* :P

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  5. @shamanth
    Oh those two perspectives made this poem so much more special!

    for the other (?) curious readers out there they are
    1. drug overdose 2. a soldier's last moments

    Oh and the kid deserves her candy!
    Dont worry,
    *gives chocolate&coffee hamper to shamanth*
    *throws in a few smiles* :)

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  6. hell yeah!!!!

    :D

    *snatches the hamper* :D

    *catches all your smiles*

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  7. lovely poem, went through your blog, a higly dreamy space. you have creativity oozing in every verse. Keep churning, good luck:)))

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  8. Damn, I was so far off :).
    But that's the beauty of it, I guess :).

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  9. @Z big
    thank you, the blog description felt very nice ;)

    @Phantom
    Thank you :) what i felt amazing was how EACH one of the people who read it felt it concerned a completely different subject! what was your guess?

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  10. Yhis one's ultimate.
    ULTIMATE.
    'The rise and fall
    of twined destinies
    everlasting seems.'
    Yes yes yesss!

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  11. @M: imagine what writing it was like

    *GRIN* :D "thank you, thank you"

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You whisper your name... but i can't hear it.